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Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.



I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.



I am not a native speaker.










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  • Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.

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    I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus

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Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.



I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.



I am not a native speaker.










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  • Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.

    – Sora Tamashii
    5 hours ago






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    I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus

    – Sora Tamashii
    5 hours ago











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Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.



I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.



I am not a native speaker.










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Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with was the cast of his features, not just like any I had seen.



I do not perfectly understand "with was" -- with what? This is rather confusing for me.



I am not a native speaker.







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  • Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.

    – Sora Tamashii
    5 hours ago






  • 1





    Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?

    – Galastel
    5 hours ago






  • 1





    I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus

    – Sora Tamashii
    5 hours ago











  • The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.

    – David Siegel
    20 mins ago



















  • Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.

    – Sora Tamashii
    5 hours ago






  • 1





    Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?

    – Galastel
    5 hours ago






  • 1





    I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus

    – Sora Tamashii
    5 hours ago











  • The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.

    – David Siegel
    20 mins ago

















Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.

– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago





Is this from something or did you write it yourself? This sentence is incorrect grammatically. There are many issues as a result. Also, wrong Stack.

– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago




1




1





Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?

– Galastel
5 hours ago





Questions about a sentence you read somewhere and do not understand belong on English Language Learners. It would be helpful to those who would answer you if you could provide the source of the sentence: where did you find it?

– Galastel
5 hours ago




1




1





I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus

– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago





I found the source, and it seems to be neo-archaic speech. Poorly written garbage. From 1966: Giles Goat-boy, Or, The Revised New Syllabus

– Sora Tamashii
5 hours ago













The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.

– David Siegel
20 mins ago





The sentence is not grammatically incorrect, although it does use an unusual form.

– David Siegel
20 mins ago










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The sentence would probably be better as follows:




He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.







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  • Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.

    – As Vet
    5 hours ago











  • No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)

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An alternate version of this sentence would be




The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.




The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.






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    The sentence would probably be better as follows:




    He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.







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    • Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.

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    • No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)

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    The sentence would probably be better as follows:




    He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.







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    • Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.

      – As Vet
      5 hours ago











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    The sentence would probably be better as follows:




    He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.







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    The sentence would probably be better as follows:




    He grinned disconcertingly then waited. My interest was held by the form of his features which just were not like any I had seen.








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    • Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.

      – As Vet
      5 hours ago











    • No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)

      – Sora Tamashii
      5 hours ago



















    • Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.

      – As Vet
      5 hours ago











    • No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)

      – Sora Tamashii
      5 hours ago

















    Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.

    – As Vet
    5 hours ago





    Okay, thank you. Your simplified version made me realize that "Disconcerting as the grin he then waited my pleasure with" is all together and I could find 'wait upon his pleasure' by Shakespeare. This is John Barth, his style is nearly perfect. I could not exactly break down the sentence, I should have associated 'wait with' right away. Sorry.

    – As Vet
    5 hours ago













    No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)

    – Sora Tamashii
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    No. You're fine. Just wanting to help as best I can. :)

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    An alternate version of this sentence would be




    The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.




    The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.






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      An alternate version of this sentence would be




      The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.




      The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.






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        An alternate version of this sentence would be




        The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.




        The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.






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        An alternate version of this sentence would be




        The look of his features -- not just like any I had seen -- was as disconcerting to me as the grin he showed as he waited for my response.




        The speaker makes clear that he is upset, mildly upset, by both the unusual facial features of his visitor and by the grin that the visitor showed. He equates these two sources of upset. The phrase "waited my pleasure with" is somewhat archaic, but in no way wrong. I would not imitate it in most writing, however.







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